I corrected my introduction but i don't have replay

Hi,
I had errors in my introduction but the other day I corrected and nobody reply me and I don't know what I should do. Please I need help. this is my introducion:
https://usasian.forumotion.net/t6616-introductionyuki13cross

Thanks ^^

That's because it's still incorrect! Also, moderator/admin won't be notified about the change unless you post a message in your topic, something like "I changed it" or whatever actually. We subscribe incorrect posts, but don't watch them (too many to handle).

then, what should I do??

well, usually the answer would be 'read the rules about introductions again' and that's what I'll say...

pay attention to the last rule especially.