Okay, I took a look and what I can say is that your song isn't fully synch
(there are lines that doesn't match the time when the word is said).
I can give you others tips :
> Personnaly, I try to shorten each bars (line) as much as possible, so that when singing you
have the time to breath or pronounce the whole word / syllab.
You did it quite well, but I saw that some line can still be shortened by one or two beat.
It's not much a great difference, in real time it's ~1/4 second ^^, so it's not very important.
Like when you have some word with the "schi" sound, I don't begin at "s" but "h", that's where
the tone really begin.
(Don't know if you understand)
I don't know how the others songmakers do, but I do it like so, I find it important.
> Always make a bar (line) for each sound / syllab.
So for this : "TERA TERA TORO TORO tokete yukunda"
It must be splitted like so "Te-ra Te-ra To-ro To-ro to-ke-te yu-ku-n-da"
> Another thing, cut your sentences
"Dakishimete motto tsuyoku nani mo kamo wasurete shimaitaikara"
Cut it like this
tsuyoku nani mo kamo
nani mo kamo
If you don't do that, can't see the lenght of the bars/lines in Ultrastar xD
Or can't read the sentence 'cause the words are miniaturized
(Not everyone have an 40°, 36°, 32° wide screen >_< on my 24° wide screen I can still read it
but you must look closer on the screen, so think for people with 17° wide screen >_<)
> As for japanese, be aware for some pronunciation/spelling.
In romaji we written "jibun", it will be pronounced as ji-bu-n (the n is like pronounced "nnn")
Like in your song you have yu-ku-n-da.
Well it's up to you to see if you split it like yu-kun-da or yu-ku-n-da, cause sometimes the "n" is
pronounced very shortly (it will depend on the song, and the lenght of the intonation on it)
I once got a song where this singer sing susunde like so : Su-su-nnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn-deeeee
So it was important to make a different line for this sound
Others words : "datte" and "motto", the double "t" indicate that the sound of the letter "a" in datte ("o" for motto)
is a long sound (or pronounced twice). When said, you said it like da-a-te (mo-o-to).
So you'll have to adjust your line for it on Yass to
I do it like so Mo-~-tto (so everyone understand that the "o" must be said again)
Once again, it's up to you to see
It will depend on the song.
When you begin with other asian language, maybe take a look of how did the others
for the spelling.
Hope I didn't annoy you with all this ^^
Well, if you will I can adjust the song for you.
I'll leave the tone for you, 'cause I'm bad at it ^^ and it seems you are good at it.
At the moment I'm adjusting a song, after this one I'll do yours (I think tomorrow it will be done).